As the daughter of an historian and someone with an archaeology master degree, it would be the most obvious choice to write historical novels when I became a writer.
However, very quickly I found that having the love of history run through my veins only complicated things when it came to writing historical novels and screenplays.
I’ve been working now for two years on a contemporary history novel (set in 1968 in Prague) and a TV mini-series (set during WW1 in Palestine) which have taught me a lot about the pitfalls of writing historical novels (and screenplays).
Before we begin, ask yourself – what is a historical novel? I’d say it’s kind of a spectrum. Some books are full of facts. In these types of stories, the author fills in only the details they cannot know like specific conversations, internal monologues, or physical reactions.
Then there are other books that are only vaguely historical. Many historical romances, like Harlequin or Regency, fall in this category. You get a sense it happened in a specific time or place, but the history is mostly limited to the fashion and the setting.
Decide early on how factual (or not) you want your story to be – You’ll save yourself a lot of heartache if you know where you can play with the facts early on.
Here are 7 Pitfalls in Writing Historical Stories
Pitfall #1: Poor research
Historical fiction is just that—fiction. But to make your story believable, you have to bring the time period to life. In that sense, historical fiction is similar to science fiction and fantasy because you have to create a world for your readers.
With historical fiction, your setting was once real. Yet, your readers did not live during the Napoleonic Wars or in Ancient Egypt, so it is just as unreal to them as a science fiction book set on Mars. You have to know what life was like during your time period to make the story believable for your readers. To make sure that you don’t fall into this pitfall make sure you don’t rely entirely on Google.
I was a university student ages before Google creators were even born. So I’m used to doing my research the “old fashion” way, meaning going to that building called “library”and spending my days there.
At the same time, I love Google. It’s handy. I can’t tell you how many times a day I Google something. It’s a great place to start your research.But here’s a little secret: you can’t find everything on Google.
Here are some things you can’t find on Google:
- How long would it take to travel from Haifa to Jerusalem in the 19th century
- What would people eat in Czechoslovakia under the Communist regime
- Layout of the first settlements in Palestine in the 19th century
The solutions to those would be to do it the “old fashion” way. Libraries which would contain out-of-print books or academic journal articles. You can find experts to ask. Join relevant Facebook groups or subreddits. Email museums or universities to find a resource. Reach out to historical societies or re-enactment groups.
Main Tip – Start with Google and continue with primary resources and second hand ones.
Pitfall #2: Too Much History, Not Enough Story
On the other hand, when you’ve spent months – sometimes years – immersing yourself in your chosen historical period, researching everything from what they used to eat to the fashions at that time or how people went to the toilet, you’ll no doubt feel the overwhelming urge to share everything you know with your reader.
But do yourself a favour Remember you’re NOT writing a history book, but a story.
This means you must selectively install your knowledge rather than dumping everything you know onto the page.
One good way of dealing with this is to seamlessly integrate the history. Check whether the information you have reveals something about the character and/or moves the story forward.
For example, it’s better to show the reader what kind of weapons would have been used during your period in a battle scene that’s integral to the plot rather than by having your protagonist take a random trip to the armoury to inspect them.
Main Tip – Your story is the most important. Your characters are more important than all your research. You are not writing a history book
Pitfall #3: Getting the Small Details Wrong
While you shouldn’t overwhelm your reader with every imaginable detail about your period, tiny historical details can really bring your story to life. They are important for world building and authenticity. Selective use of some of the small details of every-day life can really help to create a sense of authenticity. The problem is when writers get these details wrong.
It’s a good idea to have a working knowledge of the state of the world during the time you are writing about. You should understand your characters’ world from a global level down to a local level.
Sure, maybe your main character isn’t into nationalism politics or economics in the 19th century, but those details will affect aspects of your character’s life.
Who are the allies and enemies? How does the currency work? What are the social norms, and what happens to people who break them?
If your book takes place in the Middle East in the 19th century, your characters won’t visit Iran or Turkey. They’ll visit Persia and the Ottoman Empire. If you’re writing about World War II in Czechoslovakia, your 20-year-old male character needs a very compelling, believable reason to not be serving in the military.
Historical context is crucial for fiction. It will help dictate character motivations and events in your story. An easy way to plan your research is checking for political, economic, geographic, and social. You don’t need to know every major world event, but a general overview will provide you context for your story.
Main Tip – You need to get the small details right so your characters and plot will be believable.
Pitfall #4: Dialogue or voice sound phoney
The fact that your story is set during The Elizabethan era does not mean that for the sake of accuracy you need to have your characters speak in a Shakespearean language.
Dialogue sounding phony is a common problem for historical fiction novelists because they imagine that in the past, people only spoke formally—unlike the slang we use today. But this isn’t true. Every time period has had different slang. Just think of how the language has changed in the short time you’ve been alive.
With historical dialogue, the trick is to avoid words and phrases that sound overly modern, focus on using neutral words that feel more or less at home both in the modern day and in earlier periods, and include a few archaic – yet still intelligible – words and phrases here and there to give the reader a good sense of the period.
If you aren’t sure whether a word fits, look up the etymology. EtymOnline and Dictionary.com are both great websites to find word origins.
But if thou insisteth on using archaic pronouns, please do thy research! Thee, thou, thine, and thy are not interchangeable!
Main Tip – Choose for creating authenticity rather than accuracy
Pitfall #5 – Historical Characters, Modern Mindsets
In the past, people had different ingrained values, views, and norms. Many of them would be considered backwards today, and some of them downright offensive.
Ancient Romans regarded gladiators fighting to the death as entertainment, slave trade was considered morally acceptable by many throughout history and was not limited to black people, attitudes on race and gender have come a long way over just the last hundred years.
The challenge is how to create characters that are historically accurate while not alienating or frustrating modern readers?
First thing is to remember that not all historical people conformed to the chief beliefs of their time. Though the slave trade may have been considered acceptable by many, a vocal lobby opposed it and eventually converted the majority to their cause.
There were progressive voices in the past on issues of race and gender, just as there are now. You can go down the route of including characters whose opinions contradict the widespread views of their time, or whose lives do not fit into the common mould, as long as there is a basis for it in history. Make sure you don’t make every character unconventional and that your unconventional characters clearly appear unusual in your wider story world.
Main Tip – when introducing a character with modern mindset make sure to setup how they are different than the prevailed beliefs
Pitfall #6: Separate Research Time and Writing Time
There is no way to know how much research you need before you start writing. I thought I knew everything I needed to know about my mini-series, but when I started writing it I kept running into things I didn’t know.
This is when things can get dangerous. Don’t fall down the research rabbit-hole. If you do, five hours will pass, and you’ll know the entire history of the battle of Beer-Sheba but only thirty words written on that day.
Instead, make a note as you’re writing to look up the information later. Then designate time in your writing schedule for research.
Main Tip – Don’t confuse between writing and researching, each has its time and space
Pitfall #7: Avoid Harmful Tropes from Historical Fiction
His-tory is the story told by the winners and is a very one-sided narrative. The country you live in always sees itself as the “good guy.” History wasn’t only kings and generals: History was as diverse as it is today. The diversity was just hidden.
Queer people existed, though in secret. Non-white, non-European people thrived all over the world. Women found ways to have power within their society and culture, even if their names do not appear in the history books.
There are some tropes and trends that have persisted through historical fiction that you should avoid. Here are some narratives that are harmful:
- the “White Saviour”: your white character single-handedly saves non-white people from some terrible event. This perpetuates the idea that people of colour are weak or helpless.
- the “Savage Tribe”: it doesn’t matter whether you’re writing about the Wild West, the colonisation of Africa, or the settlement of Australia. Indigenous peoples are not barbarians.
- the “Damsel in Distress”: Women have always been capable of finding power and even fighting back.
- the “Tragic Queer Love Story”: this is true of all fiction. But more often than not, queer fiction involves one or both of the people in a relationship dying. It perpetuates the idea that being LGBTQ+ will end badly.
- You should also avoid the “Faceless Token Character.” If you include a diverse character, make sure you give them a name. Take care not to portray them as weak or subservient. Check if they come across as deviant or unlikeable? Are they dynamic characters?
Main Tip – Beware of those tropes – we don’t need more characters that portray marginalised populations in an unimportant or negative light.
What are YOUR tips and thoughts on how to avoid mistakes in writing historical stories?
Would love to get your input in the comment box below.
14 thoughts on “Pitfalls in Writing Historical Novel”
This is really great Vered — and fascinating for me seeing the ‘inside’ of your brain as I have read your historical novel!
Thanks Lucy – You just made my day… still working on that novel to improve it…
Brilliant post. My wip is a historical fiction but based on real people and events
Thanks for your lovely words Donna… same with my WIP… what period are you writing about?
Don’t let the truth get in the way of a good story…is a phrase I’ve heard…..although I think what we are looking for is a truth, an emotional truth….eg A Beautiful Mind has been criticised for playing fast and loose with ‘the truth’ but perhaps what people misjudge is who the real hero is here, its Alicia Nash, hers is the beautiful mind that John Nash acknowledges…I should say that it was Akiva Goldsman who wrote ABM who stated this about who the hero is, I cant claim any credit. But writing emotional truths is the gold that writers look to mine and then show us and make us care as Andrew Stanton says…
Totally agree with you James! both on the phrase of truth vs, good story but mostly about Alicia Nash – I also think the performance of Jennifer Connelly deserved an Oscar and was overlooked
Thank you Vered Netta for a very useful article pointing out various pitfalls of writing
historical screenplays or other works. Am working on a novella about my own mother,
who sued for Breech of Promise to Marry in male-dominated, 1940 New Zealand. A TV
pilot for an historical series working-titled “Voyage of the Holy Grail” in which Joseph
of Arimathea takes the Grail and Jesus’ close family and Disciples to Britain is another
special and perhaps more remote and difficult historical challenge.
These are two challenging projects you’re tackling York. Good luck with them
Loved all of these. Really helpful. I believe I actually followed all of them when I wrote my feature TILLIE, based on a turn of the century book (1904), about a young Mennonite farm girl who dreams of getting an education. In my case, I would say I found almost 95% of everything I needed on Google. However, I visited the approximate area (in Pennsylvania) where the story would have taken place, and visited a Mennonite center so I could ask very specific questions. So, Google worked for me, but, I also had the hardback book that I could refer to as often as I needed.
Otherwise, there is so much of value in this post and it should be considered carefully when pursuing your historical project, novel or screenplay or otherwise.
Thanks for your valuable input David. Interesting to know what kind of questions you asked the Mennonite community.
It’s like I wrote Google is a good start but certain specific details cannot be found on Google but would need direct original resources.
What a fantastic article with great insights. Super helpful.
Thanks so much for your kind words Jon. Means a lot to me coming from you.
Really good and informative article, Vered. I love writing fiction about “ancient Egypt”, which I put in quotes because it covers tens of thouands of years and I have to be careful to be specific in the time I’m writing about.
Thanks so much Fiona! “Ancient Egypt” is a tricky topic to tackle as an historical novel. So much of what we know are assumptions and ideas we have about that period. Even historians and archaeologists are finding it hard to agree on many topics.
It’s quite a challenge to tackle it, Chapeau for doing it.